I thought I could
Just chop some wood.
No one was near,
So that was good.
My horse’s ear
Flickered with fear —
Or maybe chill,
It wasn’t clear;
She waited till
She’d had her fill
Of polar air
There on that hill;
And then my mare
Shot me a glare
And left me there
And left me there.
Image: o by Flickr user Kristel Jax, published under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivs 2.0 Generic (CC BY-NC-ND 2.0) license.
This is, of course, in parody of Robert Frost’s immortal “Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening,” which — I am reliably informed — is in the public domain in the United States, by the skin of its teeth.
Very effective – spot on iambic and yet for a very dramatic effect you wrote in dimeter rather than tetrameter which tightens the poem and makes it more immediate, more electric. Very inventive thing to do and still kept that “Frost” naturalness and ineffable quality. Well done!
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Merci beaucoup! It was fun to write, thanks for a happy prompt!
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you aced this form and then some… I’m guessing you were taking too long with that wood, aye? The horse is like, “hey! I gotta life too ya know!” hehehe…
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Yes, horses and me, we are not copacetic. So glad you enjoyed my little diversion!
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LOVED!!!!! IT!!!!!!!!!!! Completely.
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Oh, you made me blush. Thank you!
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I love that you shortened the lines to dimeter (?) — which adds to the effect of making it a little more flippant. Beside the title is genius, putting a purpose behind Frost’s poem .. Great stuff.
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I always wondered what he was doing out there in the middle of the night…
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You just nailed it dear. A standing ovation for you.
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That makes me happy! Thank you so much.
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Glad, you are welcome.
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I love the staccato use of syllables rather than iambs, which gives the poem such a lively feel. The last two lines left me wondering about bruised behinds!
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Bad mare! Excellent response to the prompt!
Anna :o]
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Thanks, Anna.
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Exactly what I’ve experienced…great job trying something new with the form!
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good one
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Thx!
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